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I, Me and Myself!
I have been calling your name I have chanted A billion warped prayers Lost in a timeless wormhole.
Waiting is infinity I have waited Ignoring taunting thoughts Eating my conscience.
I have been flying On invisible battered wings Spiralling in eternal circles Of an endless realm.
I have been weeping Empty eyes shedding Dry silent acid tears Corroding my skin.
I have been laughing Artificial affected agonised screams Stretching lies creating lines On a scarred face.
I am normal Don’t you perceive Don’t you see Don’t you observe Am I not praying? Am I not flying? Am I not weeping? Am I not laughing? And just for your acknowledgement I keep waiting!
What stayed with you?
A line that lingered, a feeling, a disagreement. Great comments are as valuable as the original piece.
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So Nilanjana, the best part of your writing is the sense of flow and suddeness. You are very artful in the art of sensuous deception. But sometimes in a maze of words, i tend to feel lost and bereft of natural energy. The "you' as against the 'I' in your poems seem to me at different times as, God, your ex-boyfriend, your father, and more often someone from the male species. We writers are a mirror mind species where every single word is a mirror added to the maze of our thought What do you have to say ? [ Reply to this ]
I have stressed over and over again that I leave the readers to make their own interpretations about anything that i have to say. I write neither for or against "man"kind. For that matter, it is humankind in general and my disposition and contribution towards it. I know that "God in Coma" has been more often than not interpreted as angst - angst towards the male species. I leave the readers to their own thoughts for I do not want to invade their personal interpretations - their lies the charm of individuality. And thank you Deepsee. I leave you to your valuable interpretations and musings (often my musings are found ridiculously "amusing"!) [ Reply to this ]
My dear Nilanjana, you possess a talent of spinning and weaving words into a web from which no one can escape. The pure genius of the mazes you create where time and religion is trapped is a marvel. You should post this particular poem on www.poetry.com. You deserve to be a poet at poetry.com. For your readers' sake, please post some of your poetry there! :) [ Reply to this ]
Thank you again Hemant. Now you are making me really embarassed. One of my pieces was chosen for the book published by poetry.com last year. May be I will send one this year as well. As for Time - it is relative as Einstein. We "trap" ourselves in it and we use religion as a weapon to justify that entrapment. Thank you for all your encouragement again. Just that thought somewhere that there are people with whom I can share an experience is enough for me. [ Reply to this ] From Nilanjana Biswas's desk Email Nilanjana Biswas 1 2 3 4 5 Total 2 ratings. Home | Post Article | General Musings | Slice Of Life | Humor | People | Wanderlust | Sports | Short Stories | Long Stories | Poetry | Book Reviews | eBooks | Devil's Dictionary | Borrowed Best:Articles | Borrowed Best:Stories | Borrowed Best:Poetry | Quick Links | Feedback if ((navigator.appVersion.substring(0,1) '); } All trademarks and copyrights on this page are owned by their respective companies. Comments are owned by the Poster. The Rest ©2000 Live2Read var site="sm3l2r" None