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Death Comes as the End

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·Monday October 09·3 min read·4 comments
Death Comes as the End (This article has been read 91 times) Posted by optimist on Monday October 09, @01:31AM This is a story of a girl who falls in love with a guy. And at last she looses her life in order to prove her depth of love to him. Story goes as... Behold her, single in the field, Yon solitary highland lass~ Reaping & singing by herself, Stop here or gently pass. Alone she cuts & binds the grain, and sings a melancholy strain; "In this whole spurious world, there is no one to listen my word". Awoke one night from a deep dream of peace, and saw within the moon light in her room, making it rich & like a lily in bloom. Suddenly at a distance she could faintly hear, a screaming noise which was coming near. Through her window she gazed in the dark, saw a woeful man coming near. As their eyes clashed, he stopped, but she tried to elope as she was in fear. Again she looked through her window, after breaking the silence of murky night. Found him lying at yon , and seems benumbed at twilight. Eftsoons she ran out to see , sat down & embrased him, swiftly she dab on his foerhead, and asked the reason behind his scream. She listened,motionless & still, the woeful snippet of his life. Unknowingly fall in love with him, which she can't avoid by artifice. He asked her to dwell for few days, wiht no intensions to meddle in her life in anyways. At this moment any how she can't abnegate, some where deep in her heart feels the contiguity which she can't elucidate. Then she asked , how she could help him, due to the benevolence developed by her from within. He said, that everyone consider him a felon, coz he made a crime & for which he tried to abscond. but he denies with this , coz he made crime , not willingly but in order to save one's life. And now the district police is after him, and want him to catch in snare. He wish to go to his homeland, but with the routes he is unaware. Being benignant in nature, she assured, how difficult may be the situation , she'll definetly help him out by, keeping herself at stake, and this shows her presumption. Again in the murky night, all the ways were elusive in dark, both decided to cross the district border, and managed to reach there atlast. She hold his hand & asked, to elope from here fast. Suddenly police arrived there, & shoot at him in order to catch in snare. But to protect she stood in front of him, & while encounter she became the victim. After listening her wail he couldn't go further, & stopped & turned back to come nearer. Hold her in his arms & tried to poise , but she says she'll see rest of the life through his eyes. At this moment, it seems she is at zenith, & rest of the world is at her beneath. She lament loud & died in his arms , & this depicts her benignity. So with this it doesn't mean that love has ended or lost, & what is lost is not love but lover's entity. And after that he took her along with him & went to his home land & there he made her memorial & every day he used to praise her & retrace all she had done for him. And the story ends with this. So with this story i've just tried to pass on a message to every one that , LOVE IS PERENNIAL FELECITY OF LIFE, WHICH IS BASED ON FIDELITY & SACRIFICE.

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Wills Ghostarchive~2001-2003

Hey even I wrote a poem .. here how it starts .."twinkle twinkle little star , how I wonder what you are .." Come on people, dont pinch from sixth grade poems! I am sure will must be turning in his grave seeing the fate of his poor reaper (at least she didnt die solitary) 0KB [ Reply to this ]

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Ujjaini Royarchive~2001-2003

Hey 'Optimist', Sorry to say - didn't like your peice at all - it's a combibnation of literary peices of great literary men - like the first part was from 'Solitary Reaper' - the middle felt like from 'Highway Man' and the ending para 'And after that he took her along with him...& retrace all she had done for him' is also from some other peice - it seems very familiar. Don't you have anything original to write?? Whatever you have written, it's a job bad done and it lacks depth and maturity. Ujjaini. [ Reply to this ]

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optimistarchive~2001-2003

i didn't take ur comment as a scurrilous remark but it was a source to improve myself. Well thanx for reflecting my weak pts.but it was a mendacoius statement by u that its a combination of literary pieces.As far as originality is concerned , i've just tried to elucidate one phase of life in my own way except the starting para which was originally taken from Solitrary Reaper, & its my fault that i haven't mentioned it in my introductry part,& if rest is simmilar to other pieces ,then its just a coincidence. And if other literary people can think & write on simmilar topic ,so why can't I ??? And i'll definitly try to bring more depth & maturity in my next attempt. Optimist [ Reply to this ]

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orange juicearchive~2001-2003

Well, don't take it too hard dear. And even though it has elements of existing literary pieces, I saw it as an interesting experiment. Nothing spectacular, I'm afraid, but interesting nonetheless. Hope you take my honest remark in earnest and keep writing whatever comes to the Heart. In the end we are all here to enjoy ourselves, aren't we??? [ Reply to this ] From optimist's desk Email optimist 1 2 3 4 5 Total 6 ratings. Home | Post Article | General Musings | Slice Of Life | Humor | People | Wanderlust | Sports | Short Stories | Long Stories | Poetry | Book Reviews | eBooks | Devil's Dictionary | Borrowed Best:Articles | Borrowed Best:Stories | Borrowed Best:Poetry | Quick Links | Feedback if ((navigator.appVersion.substring(0,1) '); } All trademarks and copyrights on this page are owned by their respective companies. Comments are owned by the Poster. The Rest ©2000 Live2Read var site="sm3l2r" None

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