My first go at crappy tasting stuff (its not supposed to SOUND crappy, if it does PLEASE tell me)... (imagine jon bon jovi or bryan adams singing this their typical straightline tones... i KNOW i'm thinking too high of my work but still try once...) comments most welcome...
Feed on your demons, take them for a ride spend some time on the darker side check the sweet rotten flavor of the spittle smeared skin scratch a little deeper, let's see how thick is your hide...
Creep a little closer to the moulting mess: a fat blob of meat and a girl undressed hear your heart throb as she gyrates feel something yet? does it penetrate?
How'd you like to have your pristine purity served? sautee'd in guilt, or maybe grilled with puerile thoughts still well preserved?
Don't bother with the story get the morals first Fill your puny head till its ready to burst And when the bus drops you where you didn't want to go, petrify your eyes, clog your ears, still your beating heart and savour the taste of your fears...
What stayed with you?
A line that lingered, a feeling, a disagreement. Great comments are as valuable as the original piece.
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I don't know if u meant it to be funny but I was laughing all the way. Very funny poem. [ Reply to this ]
hmmmm.... i feel like like Dr. Jhatka in Lotpot (diagnosed cancer and treated cold)... pray tell me why it was so funny... thanks for reading, swann [ Reply to this ] From swann's desk 1 2 3 4 5 Total 0 ratings. Home | Post Article | General Musings | Slice Of Life | Humor | People | Wanderlust | Sports | Short Stories | Long Stories | Poetry | Book Reviews | eBooks | Devil's Dictionary | Borrowed Best:Articles | Borrowed Best:Stories | Borrowed Best:Poetry | Quick Links | Feedback if ((navigator.appVersion.substring(0,1) '); } All trademarks and copyrights on this page are owned by their respective companies. Comments are owned by the Poster. The Rest ©2000 Live2Read var site="sm3l2r" None